blog week 13a

http://tiffanyc4english.blogspot.com/

In Tiffany's blog from November 15th, she explains herself and the tools very well. She introduces each of the four tools that helped her the most in the second paragraph of her blog, then following her second paragraph she goes further into detail about each of the tools, explaining how and why they are so important in the writing process. She explains that without them, the writing would have some confusion to the reader and so on. Tiffany did wonderful!

http://betinablount.blogspot.com/2012/11/stepping-stones-to-storywriting.html#comment-form

In Betina's blog entry from November 6th, I feel as though she did a good job explaining the basics. However, she should have went into futher detail about what an Introduction is made of, more of an explination of the Thesis Statement and it's purpose to the writing process, as well as a more in depth explination of what a Conclusion is and what's included within it. Overall, the basic information was good, but the explinations need to be more drawn out. They need to be explained more.